Amanda Heath

First I'd like to say although I have some negative comments, I also have positive.

To begin with, the starting of the story drove me absolutely insane. I couldn't tell if the narrator was speaking to me, or telling a story. It took me awhile to figure out that this story reads more like a dear diary, or dear john. It is like she is writing to someone specific and expecting an answer back.

Next, there were so many grammar issues. I am no expert. However, even I know how to proofread and make sure that my spelling errors are fixed. I also proofread to make sure that the sentences line up. For an example. The sentences didn't flow together. It was like the action was taken before the plan or something like that. There was one line that was something like, I went for swim at night. I ran and put my swimsuit on. Something like that. And it was a little nuts. I had to switch the words around in my head in order to understand it. Forgive me if I'm wrong, but shouldn't that have been: I put on a bikini and then went for a swim. With no period in between. And of course the words reversed. There were several errors just like this throughout the entire book.

You have to also remember that with pauses and sighs and things like that is where grammar is important. LOL! I don't know the right word for it so this is where that whole "I'm not an expert", comes in handy, but a sigh is usually a pause. A comma is a pause. There are so many times throughout this entire book where I had to go back and read what the hell was said because there was a missing comma. It drove me insane.

Third, you have to read this book as someone without emotion. Because the narrator seems to have some sort of effective disorder. Is that the term? Meaning there emotionally inept? Is that the word I'm looking for? See again I'm not an expert. But, I do know that a good author draws you into the story, makes you feel what they are feeling. But you can't do that when the narrator aka, the author, has no emotion. I struggled with that throughout the entire book as well. Where there should have been anger and passion, there was flatness. No I'm not actually saying the author has no emotion. Chances are they have a lot. But they're not portraying it in the storytelling of this book. Everything seems so flat. Even the passion. Totally flat.

Okay so that's enough of the negative, I've read other reviews and they're all on about how channing was a caveman basically. That he seemed Territorial and abusive. I didn't see that. I mean I saw the territorial part, but I didn't see him being actually overly abusive. I did find that there were times when she should have stuck up for herself, or shut you know what up. So of course I want to smack her those times.

It's a very sweet story. And very rags to riches. And very twisted in places. It is a story with a lot of potential. I think that if the author were to invest in a better editor, as well as proofread her own stuff, this story could have been really awesome. Maybe one day we'll get a rewrite who knows. I'm new to this author, so this is my first review. And I hope to God that she didn't feel like I was trying to insult her or upset her. It was not my intention. But I do tend to share my honest opinion, and sure, I do suffer from foot and mouth disease a lot, but at least I'm sharing my honest opinion and not blowing smoke up their ass.

I will also say that the author won my heart when she used the saying that I have said the majority of my life. Douche canoe.… (meer)

Oh my god.

So let's just say that this book was a huge, insanely huge, improvement from the first book. The first book had a stream lack of emotion to it. However this book was a massive improvement. It was not without its issues. There were times where the author messed up simple things like its versus it's. And so forth. But I was able to figure out what she was trying to say in my head.

Stop being said, oh my god. Is that ending. Holy shit. Or as I used to say as a child, holy shit, batman.

All through the entire story I cried. I have been in that position. So I understood her pain. Hell I still feel it, I mean my own experience. And then the relationships developing around her. I never liked annabella. God I even hate her name. But it was so sad. And the way that she treated the brothers. Anytime that there is a girl between two brothers, and it's not a porn, is a bad bad recipe for disaster. Or a good one if you really want to look at it that way. And then rachel? Oh my god. That's all I can say. You guys should read this book, it's a good one. It's kind of freaky. And the thing is is I've seen that happen. I've seen it all happen. So this should be interesting. All right time for the next book.… (meer)

Okay, who's with me? How many people out there wanted to murder Annabella? I wanted to rip her pretty little head right off her shoulders.

See this is what I mean, the author has definitely improved from the first book. I actually felt the emotion in this particular book.

And honestly for all the shit that Annabella pulled, I think she deserves to get hit by a train just like the author said.

There was so much in this book that I had to laugh my ass off about. Especially anything having to do with ASD. Nathan was adorable. When he's talking to pierce about having sex with Rachel while she's pregnant, I just about died laughing because, when I was younger before I started having babies, I had those exact same questions. And I was just as intrusive with those questions. And I didn't see a problem in asking him either. It's funny the things that we question in life, and not take into consideration people around us. It's not that people with ASD don't care what the people around them think, it's just a logical question. And we want logical answers.

So I have to say in this book I definitely identified with nathan. but I also know what Pierce and Rachel went through. Been there, done that, got the t-shirt. Lol. Anyway I'm going to read the next book. But that really surprised you?… (meer)

Finally, it's over.

If you took out anything to do with ashley, then this was an okay book. However, too much stuff went down that should have been in book 4, but obviously they decided to make a different book series instead of following along with this series.

Please bear with me I'm a little stressed out. This book was crazy. It read like somebody had a schizophrenic attack combined with multiple personalities combined with some form of emotional problems.

(Please don't take that as me insulting people with mental disorders, I have a whole slew of them up with my own.)

I absolutely loved book two and three. Book one was okay. This book was horrible. I don't have a clue what kind of medication others that gave this five stars were taking. Because they must have had something to keep their thoughts not all jumbled up like this book made my head.

(Again, I do not mean to insult anyone, I'm on tons of medication. That's why I'm able to say so calm during this review. I know y'all are looking at yourselves going yeah oh. But you have to admit you need some medication in order to keep all of the stuff straight. I suggestion hallucinogens)

And I'm sure you can read above my whole thought pattern is completely screwed up right now. I'm trying to get my thoughts out but I'm so stuck on all of these little tiny things that happen throughout the book that my brain is just bleeding.

Okay so it's all great that it all worked out in the end. But the emotional pain that these characters put themselves through was completely unnecessary. And I've experienced something in this book and it was a bit of a trigger, so I think the book should have a trigger warning. Moving on from that, I want to say that I enjoyed the book but I can't. It got two stars for me as opposed to the original one that I was going to give only because a few points made me laugh.

I had to skim over anything having to do with Damien and ashley. Or anything to do with mob fights or bikers or whatever. Because from further investigation like I had mentioned above, the author for some deranged reason, made it a whole separate series or, starting of a series. But she included it all throughout this book without telling us that there was a spinoff. I think that was kind of irresponsible as an author. But that's just my opinion.

So now in order to understand stuff that happened in this book I have to backtrack and read the MC book and then come back and read this other book partially again. And I'm sorry but that sucks. But because of my OCD I have to read the damn book.

(Normally when I start a series, and I make it at least 50% through the first book, I commit to the whole series. And when I say this, don't take it lightly. I read Bella forrest books..lol.)

And also the ending where the children are talking. Max's I could read. However as soon as Mari started talking, I basically shut the book. I don't know if there's more children talking throughout the end of the book, but I had to shut it. Because it talks about this mc. Damien walks in. I can't read their parts without understanding who the hell they are.

(And when I say that I mean, there are only vague comments about who this MC is. Vague comments about Ashley's husband. Vague comments about her being shot?!)

All in all I have to say Amanda screwed up with this book. She should not have made Ashley's story a separate series from this series. She should have stuck with the book called kiss me, and then maybe do a spin off of the full series.

Also when I read that this was a POV from channing, Royal and Rachel I had it in my head that meant their views on books one, two and three. Their stories. But no it was a completely different group of stories base years in the future.. And that made me even more confused. I felt like a freaking pinball. Anytime that I started a new chapter I heard ding ding ding ding to show how many times this story was going to bounce around and make me psychotic.

I would really love to talk to someone else who has read all of this series, not including the mc, and see how they followed along. Because at the end of this book, my emotions are so strung out. And not because of the story itself. It's because of the author. And not in a good way. It's made me lose faith in her. And that sucks.

(A great author can make you feel the emotions. The connection that each character has. They can pull you into the story and make it feel like you are either part of that story or sitting on the couch watching it unfold. When I say that Amanda upset me with this book, I am not talking about the kind of author that I just mentioned. I'm talking about someone who must have had a lot going on in her life at that time, and it led into her books.)

I want to give her another chance. But the MC book is completely ruined for me even if I do read it. Because of the fact that she included so much of it in book 4 of make or break. If she had stuck to her original plan, then all of this wouldn't be happening. I probably would have written a glowing review..

And with that being said, talk about spin-offs, the ending of the book where they're talking through the children, does that mean there's another spin-off? Oh my God my head hurts. I'm going to get online and play some second life, or maybe some wow. Maybe I should go play some wow so I can beat the living crap out of some stuff and work off some of this aggression.

Amanda Heath has potential to be a great author. I see that she has several books that she has written. And maybe those books are better. Maybe they are more emotional, have more connection. I don't know. But from the experience that I have personally had with her from this series, I found she had some potential. I found that she does have the ability to draw us in, and make us feel emotion. I know she has the ability in her to make us feel that connection to her characters. However with this book, and unfortunately with the MC book even though I haven't read it yet, she epically failed.

I am not being mean. I'm being honest. And I honestly don't think that other people were honest with her. I think they wanted to make her happy, and agreed with everything that she wrote. I think it's important to tell people when their stories are not connecting to their audience. It's something to work on.

I'm hoping, that I can calm down enough, after I read the MC book cuz let's face it, that's going to drive me insane, but I am hoping that I'm able to calm down enough to wait a couple weeks and then give Amanda another shot. Because like I said, she has several books. Maybe I just hit a bad series. And see even that, I'm annoying myself, because it's not a bad series, it's just a bad book.… (meer)