Lisa Mondello

A standard predictable forced marriage leads to love story. Written with some talent, enough to keep the wet and cold day outside at bay. However I am finding my feet as an editor and this book made me want to scream. Try to have one error every 5,000 words minimum please, but when the Mercedes turns into a BMW within a few chapters - OK he may have had more than one car, but the implication it was the same car as mentioned in the earlier chapter - well scream. Was he meant to be honeymooning in Aruba (Chapter one) or Australia(Chapter 3) Then there are the spelling mistakes - the homophones: gate used instead of gait, Sheers (transparent) rather than shears (scissors), bowling water, not boiling water, saddled up rather than sidled up, and then there are the spelling errors. In all 54 found errors in one reading. I would be firing my beta readers and my editor - if you have one. You may get readers with a cute or interesting storyline, but you keep them with flawless writing, because that is how you earn your reader's respect.… (meer)