I think that some of the words chosen to describe things could have been different. Replacing pussy, with core.. that sort of thing... I know it was meant to be explicit but, honestly it wasn't very effective.
I loved the storyline, and I like that this small story opened it up for a longer story. Makes me want to keep checking back for an update. Oh also... saying "I could be breeding" should have been ovulating... because breeding is more of a past action, less than a current act. If that makes sense.
The wording made me think she was with some else whereas ovulating, would have been more current.

This is my first experience with this author. I am sorry if I was too harsh. ( )

Sexy, fun, and romantic. I liked this almost as much as her PDA series! ( )